There lay an angel!

Is this poetry? is this prose? I know not the answer for this riddle…but the words poured out and I couldn’t help it.

There lay an angel…

Her eyes sought some long lost picture
But all she could see were people moving along,
Dilapidated buildings and crowded markets.
She could look at the whole wide world
But the world could see only her eyes….
Only a pair of green emeralds, glittering at times with grief.

Did she ever feel pleasure or pain?
No one could make a guess,
Her stoic countenance never gave much away.
She had lost touch with herself
The past still hung upon her present
As a shadow that frightened away happiness.

The wind brushed across her face,
As if to wipe away tears that had never once been shed.
The birds sang to comfort her soul,
The waves rose high to fill her heart with hope,
Alas it was too late!
She was oblivious to the term “everything-around-her”

A lonely soldier marching up the highland
Had once been enshrined in her heart.
She wanted to see him just one last time
Since she knew she will not live long.
She had travelled all this distance and crossed the seas,
To see the one face in which she could seek peace.

Her eyes met his,
Her purpose thus fulfilled and heart appeased,
She lay in a dreamless sleep…as if never to awaken.
That night, as the first snow flake kissed her face
There lay an angel“, the flake told her friends,
whose soul was truly blessed!”

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26 Responses to “There lay an angel!”

  1. Dushti says:

    If you break the prose into different lines, it becomes poetry 😀

    Atleast, thats how I feign poetry !

  2. Anu says:

    @dushti
    poetry to me is more ordered, yet more abstract, can be subject to various intrepretation yet has the authors own style…

    poetry to me is very diffrent from prose. not just in the way of writing it but in the way of explaining the authors intention

    In this case, i could not put this in prose..each stanza is ordered in its own way and the intrepretation is what the readers feel…

    but i wouldn’t call it poetry either since it flows like a story and truly speaking it dosent rhyme but i wouldn’t want to write it any other way

    Hence the confusion….:-)

  3. Nivi says:

    lets defy definition…Its poetry to me..its abstract and yet conveys what it set out to in the first place..Its true to its intention and did not get lost in definitions …

    “The past still hung upon her present
    As a shadow that frightened away happiness.”
    Very very profound. I loved these lines. I always say..your poetry is deep..And it made a better impact as it not try to get rhyming..

    all i can say is Brilliant!!!

  4. BKa says:

    Toooo good Anu :-)

  5. ajaygroups says:

    Hey atom,

    Yet another masterpiece.Brilliant Anu.U somehow seem to be showcasing the fact that ur a mini dynamo packed tightly with so many skills.Yet another feather to ur cap!!. Awesome!.

    @Bka:
    Dei , u that busy ?… Just one line to praise this beautiful work?Vetti Payale

  6. navien says:

    It’s poetry!! Awesome anu!!Another feather to ur cap!!Keep them comin!!

  7. Anu says:

    @nivi,b.k and navien
    thx dude! glad to know u guys have decided on it being poetry

    @ajay
    thx da…btw i think b.k is still angry abt the fact that i told him abt the laptop thro the blog :-)

  8. Anu says:

    @nivi
    “Its true to its intention and did not get lost in definitions …” beautiful line! u shd try ur hand at poetry too dude!

  9. Nivi says:

    @ anu
    Haha .. na i prefer to leave certain things to proffessionals 😉

  10. Sesh says:

    Hey Anu,

    After a long dormancy, came up a very good poem, those good old days at school, ur paintings, drawings n numerous poetry, some of which came up in our school magazine…. wow man, wat an energy, wat a warmth does these bring upon a person..

    Kudos Anu!!!

  11. Anu says:

    @sesh
    hey im sooooooo glad u still remember those old school poetry days…even i had forgotten that it got published in the school magazine :-)

  12. CM-Chap says:

    That’s a masterpiece for sure… No matter it is a prose or poetry

  13. Harish says:

    Englipis la edo solreega….
    chinna paiyanukku onnum puriyala :-(

  14. Anu says:

    @cm-chap
    thx dude!:-)

    @harish
    considering the kind of flair for the language that you possess, idhallam chumma jujuppi for you :-)

  15. Princess Banter says:

    It’s beautiful poetry. Very beautiful poetry…

  16. adithya says:

    WIThOUT DOUBT poetry!!!.. Actually i dont go by definitions or the rule book ( lets say I am honestly unaware of any such rules)… but my justification is it so beautifully written and delicately woven into one hell of an amazing flow… that it has to be poetry.

    By far the best poetry I have EVER read… really reall well written buddy.. and hey I never knew you could write poems too.. but hey apparently pisceans are very poetic.. :).. so maybe I can point to the stars as the reason 😉

    btw really loved the whole poetic narration , and especially your description of her eyes “a pair of green emeralds, glittering at times with grief”.. really I have to give it to you yaar… u just maintained that tempo of sadness and the way u constantly linked it to the waves , wind.. mind blowing..

    So much for me writing a book.. you better come up with a book ;).. and I am serious :)

  17. adithya says:

    and forgot to mention… what amazing last lines

    “There lay an angel”, the flake told her friends,
    “whose soul was truly blessed!”

    that mention of “Flake told her friends”.. nice touch… hats off!!

    Sincere request from a fan: Do come up with one more poem :)

  18. Anu says:

    @adithya
    hey thx dude! actually my fav line was also “green emeralds, glittering at times with grief” :-) kinda formed an alliteration(hope thats the correct spelling!)

    will try my best to honor your request in the coming days! glad to know u liked the poem and that i have a fan…:-)

    @princess
    thx dude! glad u liked it!

  19. Anu says:

    @adithya
    Hmmm i don know abt the poetic aspect of it but one thing i can say is that pisceans are not grounded to reality, they just somehow seem to elude gravity and float around in their own imaginay world!:-)

    almost reminds me of phoebe when she says “i don believe in gravity. i don feel pulled down so much as being pushed away” :-)

  20. santhosh says:

    btw, tagged you.
    get the set of q’s from my blog, if interested

  21. adithya says:

    @anu:

    Hey yeah it did form an excellent alliteration. As for the spelling of alliteration… who cares when u have an excellent poem to back it up :)

    and please do comeup with atleast one more poem :).Btw I totally agree about the ground reality problems of pisceans I am one too :). But hey whats wrong in floating in dreams .. life is better that way :D. Yeah.. I do remember that friends thingy of Phoebe… lol.. totally true for pisceans 😉

  22. Anu says:

    @santosh
    working on the tagged questions…:-)

    @adithya
    Whoa! gr8 to know u are a piscean. I believe sometimes only a piscean can understand another. we are sometimes so far away from being grounded to reality. but i luv every bit of being one!

  23. Shruti says:

    Hi Anu,
    This is one of the very good works that I have seen…
    I didnt know that U write so beautifully!!……..

    Keep it up!!! :)

  24. Anu says:

    @shruti
    thanks!!! Welcome to my blog and keep visiting :-)

  25. akilan says:

    Simply Superb! words are put beautifully to capture the moments.. As I don’t know precisely about poetry and prose, I can’t say where ur masterpiece fits..

    I don’t know the meaning of some of the words u have used.. but could get the meaning as i read..

  26. Anu says:

    @akilan

    Glad u liked it!!! i’m more happy abt the fact that u have finally read it after all my pestering :-)

    Welcome to my blog and keep visiting! :-)

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